Bahahaha. No one does modern era madness like you. Love it!
My only suggestion (if you want one) is to name the song. It feels to me as a reader like you aren't sure what song it is, like it's just a handy plot device. Which, of course, it is, but even making up a name would lure me away from wondering if there really is such a song. Hope that makes sense and is helpful.
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Date: 2010-01-10 03:13 pm (UTC)From:My only suggestion (if you want one) is to name the song. It feels to me as a reader like you aren't sure what song it is, like it's just a handy plot device. Which, of course, it is, but even making up a name would lure me away from wondering if there really is such a song. Hope that makes sense and is helpful.
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